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"It's been a while since I've seen you around."
"..."
"You haven't needed me as much as usual as of late."
"..."
"Actually, allow me me to amend that statement, you've been too arrogant to accept my help as of late."
"... I never needed you in the first place."
"Oh! Is that so? I was unaware of this. After all, without me, you'd still be a man with no home, no life, sitting on the side of the street. Not to mention, you're life fell to shambles after I left. Logic states that you are, in fact, useless without me."
"That's a lie."
"Is it? Or are you the liar here?"
"It is."
A man leaned down and picked up a stone, and then tossed it into the pond, distorting its glassy surface. His companion spoke no more.
"..."
"You haven't needed me as much as usual as of late."
"..."
"Actually, allow me me to amend that statement, you've been too arrogant to accept my help as of late."
"... I never needed you in the first place."
"Oh! Is that so? I was unaware of this. After all, without me, you'd still be a man with no home, no life, sitting on the side of the street. Not to mention, you're life fell to shambles after I left. Logic states that you are, in fact, useless without me."
"That's a lie."
"Is it? Or are you the liar here?"
"It is."
A man leaned down and picked up a stone, and then tossed it into the pond, distorting its glassy surface. His companion spoke no more.
Literature
Clowcadia Chapter 1 Shadow of Lineage
Clowcadia
Chapter 1
The Shadows of Lineage
Through the enchantment of the drama the traveler notices that the drama itself was the illusion that had been cast upon him but also upon the citizens of the realm from the realm’s own great dark shadows, recognizing the darkness the traveler charms the globe with fluid water magic that he has honed and distilled his entire life from his own menacing dark shadow of his own lineage. Understanding that the shadows of all realms rise from lineage before every being, it also poses great depth of magic behind the illusions that had been cast on him thus it was his duty to cast away the deception
Literature
Shadow of Vapor
One by one they all fall to the ground
Letting out their final silent sound
The heartrending scream of another soul drowned
Listen closely and you'll hear it. FEAR IT.
One last gasp and they all fade away
The darkness shrouds the light of day
With a bitter smoke, turning everything gray.
The second night is coming quicker. THICKER.
Clouds of blackness bring a toxic air
The living souls cry out in despair
Inhaling the same fumes, they all must share.
No escaping from the illness... STILLNESS.
Literature
Darkness
All consuming Darkness,
Slithering through the world unseen,
Twisting till nothing is as it once has been,
Leaving the world lifeless.
Fun and love destroyed,
Happiness it seeks.
Persisting till one's annoyed
And one breaks.
The Darkness never leaves,
Like water one could believe,
Changes for it needs
But let's you bleed.
Accompanying one restless,
Keeping others at bay.
Stepping on one as one lay,
Ever consuming Darkness.
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Alright, day nine, done!
Inspired by this visual prompt: [link]
So what did you think?
Did you realize the man was talking to his reflection?
Do you think that concept actually worked?
Also, about the last paragraph, did it seem out of place because it wasn't dialogue? Did it mess with how the piece flowed?
Please tell me your thoughts!
Inspired by this visual prompt: [link]
So what did you think?
Did you realize the man was talking to his reflection?
Do you think that concept actually worked?
Also, about the last paragraph, did it seem out of place because it wasn't dialogue? Did it mess with how the piece flowed?
Please tell me your thoughts!
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'Not to mention, you(')r(e) life fell to shambles after I left.' - delete ()
I thought it was good.
At first no, but then I'm slow sometimes so don't take it to mean that others wouldn't. Looking at the prompt it all makes sense, you know, not that talking to yourself in a pool of water makes the best of sense.
Yes it did. I think maybe if you expanded it a little it would work better. I'd be of no use in terms of where it should be expanded though. Maybe write as much back and forth as you can, and then cull it back down again to the most important parts? I'm only saying this because I'm interested to know what happened previously, what the reflection 'helped' with before. Maybe that's a little beyond the point of the story...oh well.
No. It makes perfect sense to have that as the ending.
I thought it was good.
At first no, but then I'm slow sometimes so don't take it to mean that others wouldn't. Looking at the prompt it all makes sense, you know, not that talking to yourself in a pool of water makes the best of sense.
Yes it did. I think maybe if you expanded it a little it would work better. I'd be of no use in terms of where it should be expanded though. Maybe write as much back and forth as you can, and then cull it back down again to the most important parts? I'm only saying this because I'm interested to know what happened previously, what the reflection 'helped' with before. Maybe that's a little beyond the point of the story...oh well.
No. It makes perfect sense to have that as the ending.